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The Anonymous Fic Feedback Meme

Inspired by The Anonymous Fic Feedback Meme 2009



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<center><span style="text-transform:uppercase;font-family:cambria,georgia;font-size:13pt;">[ <a href="http://anonfeedback.dreamwidth.org/304.html"><b><font color="#47c2e7"><u>ANONYMOUS FIC/WRITING FEEDBACK MEME</u></font></b></a> ]</span><br><small><a href="">My Thread</a></small></center>

Comments

[(Anonymous)]

i adore your storytelling, just in case this hasn't been made clear before >: you're always so good at taking people for a ride, and there's something very charming about your stories, be it in the sequencing or the concept or the details.

that said! there are times when your use of language is a little detracting when it could be adding to it all instead. it can be a little heavy handed and pedantic and it ends up feeling like i'm being beaten over the head with words and words and words. the other thing is (iirc) more story specific, but there are some that might benefit from some rethinking in terms of scenes and transitions between scenes and whether certain scenes should be broken up at all. (imperfections in the system is what is coming to mind atm but i think i had this comment with some other fics as well? WILL HAVE TO GET BACK TO YOU ON THAT)

dialogue and characterisation! is..hit and miss :3 but i think you're aware of it? i can't quite place my finger on it but there are times when characterisation does fall quite flat, in particular for people who aren't the main character/focus. same thing with dialogue, there's also the occasional clunkier wording and speech that doesn't sound quite natural? (but then there's times when your dialogue is spot on and characterisation is great and tl;dr i love you and i love your writing lmfao.)

[yuzuru]

oh my goodness anon thank you so much! i can't tell you how glad i am to hear that.

okay, i get where this is coming from lmao. i didn't like how i worded some stuff in the past, so i kind of amped it up for that particular fic but i probably went overboard lmao. but i'm curious about the transition thing, especially with imperfections in general. I'LL BE WAITING, ANON. :D

DIALOGUE IS THE HARDEST THING FOR ME EVERRRRR orz especially when writing AUs, i'm not exactly sure what would be believable and what wouldn't be. pretty sure i said this on twitter and pretty sure you're on my tlist (LMAO), but i think i tend to fit the characters more to the role i want them to play in the story rather than fitting the story to how the characters actually are. so i'll take that into account for sure. :) but i'm curious what you meant by 'fall flat' as in the characters are undeveloped, or as in the characters don't seem like themselves? (ilu too anon ♥)

[(Anonymous)]

i am the most anon anon okay.

re: transitions, i'm not sure if i'm the best person to explain it because god knows i have trouble with it myself, but eg the first (Year 3112, The Korean Union, Earth) section, the first three scenes could have been combined. the fact they were each short made it a little choppy and ended up jerking me out of the narrative each time? i'd have to reposition and reorient myself if that makes sense. something about how ~*movement*~ is important both in the writing and in the story itself. same thing with the "come," junghwan says [...] so he comes <- could have been one scene?

SHUSH I AM ANONYMOUS. OKAY. DO NOT UNDERMINE MY ATTEMPTS TO BE ANON. and as...someone who is guilty of that as well at times, fit the characters to the role but let them shape the story as well. it's okay if the story doesn't go exactly as you planned?

um, underdeveloped! ...too lazy to go hunt for examples rn but i think you do fall into a cardboard-cutout trap at times. which, mind, everyone does, BUT I'M GOING TO POINT IT OUT ANYWAY!?

[yuzuru]

okay, that makes sense to me. a lot of my past stories were more telling-based (like "this happened this way"), so the short sections kind of worked (because the scenes were short to begin with etc) but now i've kind of shifted to a THIS IS HAPPENING RIGHT NOW kind of thing, so i'm not really used to writing that kind of narration. so i'll go look for that in some of my wips! and orz i'm always proud of myself when i have a long section, so. :D

LMAO i still don't know exactly who you are so NO WORRIES /O/ my stories are like the strongest point so if they don't go according to plan, i end up losing track of them and then it just becomes really messy and disorienting, so i'm having a dilemma rn ;-;

i think i'd reply to that as, if i had all the characters developed, then it would probably again get really messy or detract from the focus of the main characters. but ANOTHER QUESTION OTL do you have a story (or stories, or fandom) in particular you can reference? :D