omg anon thank you so so much for this. there are times when i'm staring at my porn/fics in general and just squinting and thinking "this sounds wrong but i can't put my finger on what is wrong". and i don't really have a beta per se, just a couple of good friends i ask to read over my fic, and most times they are not inclined to tear my fic to pieces (for which i am grateful, ngl). but if you could, are you able to give examples of where you think the dialogue sounds stilted and off? i am really bad at dirty talk >.> i like reading it, so i suppose that's why i like writing it too, but i'd be extremely grateful if you were able to point out where i went wrong so i can identify these problem areas!

thank you again :DD ALL ABOARD MATEYS /bricked